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Richard's life *NOW 20% MORE INSIDE MY HEAD!*
Anything that you have honestly wanted to know about me, you'll find it here. What i'm going through, as well as poems, and how my week has gone, etc etc.
3 Poems to Live For - Lifefest
1.) "A Whisper in the Wind"

A soft whisper in the wind..
It sounded like you.
I ran in the direction it came from.
"Come to me." It said.
"Come to my loving arms."
I felt alone, discarded
amongst the soulless puppets.
We were played with, loved,
Then thrown into the toy chest,
Never to be seen again.
Your voice caressing my broken heart.
"Let me hold you for ever."
"Let me take away your pain."
You wanted to mend the cracks,
The holes in my heart.
You came to the toy chest,
And picked me up with utmost care.
Unlike heartless monsters who crave
To see a broken heart bleed.

2.) "Life Fought Death"

A boy picked up a pen,
and wrote his mind.
A young girl grabed a pencil,
and made art.
A child opened it's mouth,
and spoke it's first word.
Life fought Death,
and Life won the battle.
A rain drop fell into the ocean,
never to be seen again.
A hunter found a deer,
and ate happily that night.
Life fought Death,
and Life won the war.
A body died, yet
the Soul lived forever.
Life fought Death.
In the end, Life won.

3.) "Bleeding Hearts"

Our hearts, small, red, and fragile.
"Handle with care!"
For they can be easily broken,
at the drop of a hair.
Only time will decide how long
till it dissapears.
"Help! My heart as been broken!"
"What should I do?!"
"Young child, were the words she spoke
to you.. Were they true?"
Slowly bleeding, a heart starts to die.
An attempt to save it with tape and glue
Has left it alive, yet infinately broken.
A heart, torn apart by love.
It never stood a chance.
A heart, killed by the mysteries
of Love's confusing dance.
Now, a heart melts away slowly,
slowly with a sad glance.


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  • User Comments: [13]
    Hey there!

    Well although the narratives and ideas you chose to write about were interesting, I'm having trouble finding the structure you're using. Poems, just like essays, have structure to them. (Sucks doesn't it?!)

    You might want to look up the different types of structures found in poetry and play around with that. Each one will give your work a different feel or tempo.

    Other than that, you're doing really great and I hope you keep it up for many years to come.

    comment DeviousToxic · Community Member · Wed Feb 28, 2007 @ 03:19pm
    oh... they're really good ^_^ specially the 2. one i loved... ^_^ just the meaning of it and so on... ^^ the 3. one os also wonderful ^_^ but well... all of them were very good ^_^keep on the good work... really want to read more of those ^^

    comment Youkai Rei · Community Member · Wed Feb 28, 2007 @ 03:35pm
    Hmm. I'm not a huge poerty person, and when I DID write poetry back in the day, I liked the ones that rhymed. I know poetry doesn't have to rhyme.

    K, so anyways.. like I said I'm not big on poetry so I don't know what to say about this. It's good, but I'll say a few things since you want criticism.

    The life and death one.. how was a boy writing, life? I liked the baby speaking its first words, because it went with the poem.. but a girl drawing? I felt it was very random.

    Also, you go from talking about raindrops, then suddenly you say about a hunter eating a deer. I was like, 'whoa.' I expected the next line to involve more weather or something like that.
    And the soul isn't life.. so how does life win the war? I don't get it.

    The other ones are okay though. No criticism here.


    comment A Large Cock · Community Member · Wed Feb 28, 2007 @ 04:55pm
    blaugh I love the second and third one master whee Their were very good and the first one was very cute blaugh 4laugh heheh ^^ you always write the best poems lol me going to show my friend and see if she wants copy rofl

    comment Gone1325 · Community Member · Wed Feb 28, 2007 @ 08:02pm
    I like the middle one the best.

    comment Kaikamahine o Pele · Community Member · Thu Mar 01, 2007 @ 02:00am
    to me, "Bleeding Hearts"
    outshines the rest by far.
    but i loved the others too 3nodding

    comment Suikyo · Community Member · Sun Mar 11, 2007 @ 04:53pm
    Ohh, I really liked the second one. :3 heart

    comment Tygerr · Community Member · Sat Mar 17, 2007 @ 10:00pm
    i heart these poems they almost made me cry well be sure i am subscribing to your journal and i have only read the first page i will be waiting for the next to come biggrin heart heart heart

    comment sweetiewithwings · Community Member · Tue Mar 20, 2007 @ 01:19pm
    nice love

    comment ~BoYCrAzEyGuRl~ · Community Member · Thu Mar 22, 2007 @ 06:25pm
    I haven't heard from you in a while,so I thought I'd come and comment your poems. Still as awesome as ever I see,and still making me think. Yet these poems seem more...I don't know,more of something.But they're all great.I liked "Life fought Death", but somehow "Bleeding Hearts" spoke to me in a way sweatdrop ...

    Anyways:
    Mucho amo,Richy-chan! heart
    ~Mootsicles

    comment Moonlight2Dawn · Community Member · Wed May 16, 2007 @ 11:11pm
    Why do you write so depressingly, I'd like a happy poem every now and then.
    x.x
    Mr. Emo, bro.
    xD
    Love you, very well written.
    Don't stop!

    comment Underscare · Community Member · Sun Jun 17, 2007 @ 07:12am
    such nice poems :]

    my favorite one was the 2nd

    i don't know why, but that one felt the most compelling to me.

    the others were contradicting, talking about happiness and pain at the same time...all the while i found this little threesome a wonderful little poetry treat heart

    comment Little Miss Illy · Community Member · Mon Jul 30, 2007 @ 02:16am
    I think.... well i dont know what to think they are just sooo good!!

    comment WinterRose0692 · Community Member · Sun Dec 02, 2007 @ 05:08am
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