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What I felt like writing today was....
i lay here in the darkness.
i cut too deep, and there's blood everywhere.
and you sit there watching.
watching me die.
already i struggle to keep my eyes open.
as you see them fade.
you smell death in the air.
and you're helpless.
i've done it.
i killed myself.
and now you must watch me fall before you.
there's nothing you can do, but still you tried to save me.
why?
why did you love me so much?
why did you care.
now as i draw my last breath i shall use it to ask you,
"was i worth it?"

please tell me what you think!
mrgreen


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  • User Comments: [4]
    i like it, its good. i usually expect them to ryme so it threw me off for a second but it brought me right back. *tryes to hide wiping a tear away*

    comment Pyrjess · Community Member · Fri Mar 30, 2007 @ 06:49am
    My eyes are blurred.
    my heart beat slowed.
    I watch you through the darkness.
    of my eyes closed I hear you weep.
    tears brim my eyes.
    blood flows and covers my arms.
    cutting to deep into your heart.
    your tears that flow down your face and onto mine.
    the wound I have inflicted onto you hurt worse than I inflicted onto me.
    I touch your face and hold you close.
    with my final breath as I draw and force through my lips .
    "I'm.....sorry"

    sorry couldn't help my self but I like the poem though

    comment Zekyn Silverwind · Community Member · Fri Mar 30, 2007 @ 06:54am
    its good,and i can relate to it...to a certent exctent...

    comment Mes A Drama Llama · Community Member · Mon Apr 09, 2007 @ 04:11am
    Both poems are beautiful! I love them.

    Sitting at death's door
    and all dressed in black
    I watch as you silently lay there.
    Not breathing, hands blood-stained.
    I cannot help but cry,
    with my brother beside me.
    It's hard to see the one I loved
    as a friend,
    laying still surrounded by soft cushins
    of the coffin in which she lays
    and beside her is the one
    she loved.

    He has a whole in the chest,
    covered by the clothes he wears
    but we know better.
    He died, beside you,
    and now lays beside you
    not taking a breath, like you,
    and laying too still for me to bear.

    I turn around and run.
    I run out and away,
    trying so hard to wipe away
    the tears that fall
    unsuccessfully.
    And slowly, I walk home,
    my heart filled with sadness.

    comment crazy34 · Community Member · Wed Apr 11, 2007 @ 04:38am
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