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The Ash Grove (Lithwen's Journal)
A hard road ahead
(Note: This entry is a classic "Lithwen complaining about stuff you don't care about" deal.)

*sigh* The one thing I hate about being a writer is that I often feel the need to finish something that really shouldn't be finished, or to fix up something that should have been buried years ago.

The current example: A "novel" I wrote about two years ago called Ancient Hatred, New Love (That title should be enough to scare most people away). I found my plans for a rewrite yesterday and decided that I would get around to it. It was my pride and joy at one point. People on certain horrible archives that shall rename nameless were quick to shower me in all sorts of "OMG! I luv this! Continu plz!" type comments, and convinced me that it was good. In fact, I was convinced that the first chapter, especcially the opening paragraph was some of the best writing I'd ever done.

An incredibly ignorant me

The moon shone brightly, its light reflecting off the surface of the lake, and making the water look like liquid silver. There were beech trees surrounding the lake, and their grey trunks seemed to be shining in the light as well, making it a perfect scene for a painting

...I think I'll just avoid commenting on that one.

The next paragraph goes on to mention the main character, so far nameless, and her inner angst. The paragraph after that- a physcial description.

For some reason, I
After glancing around to make sure that no one but the raptor was looking, she pulled off her hood, revealing her long brown hair, which was almost totally straight and reached down to her lower back. Her face was pretty, with pale skin, delicate features and deep, enchanting blue eyes famed with long dark lashes...

Thankfully, I redeemed myself slightly by mentioning that pretty girls were a dime a dozen, so she was nothing remarkable, but still...*shudder*

The story is littered with this type of writing, and the main character is such an obvious Mary Sue that I think I'll put her through the test later and see whether her head explodes before mine does.

Still, I think I can make this story work. It's eating at me, and it will drive me crazy if I don't at least attempt it. Any suggestions on how to prevent myself from going crazy when I continue reading over the original would be greatly appreciated.


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  • User Comments: [2]
    I had something incredibly insightful to say about this last night, but now that I have time to actually make my comment, I can't for the life of me remember what exactly that incredibly insightful thing was.

    *sigh*

    comment Falathrim · Community Member · Fri Feb 25, 2005 @ 06:47pm
    Oh well, it's the thought that counts ^.^

    Anyways, I found a part later on where I describe some guy's eyes as "Melted pools of chocolate". I've been laughing about it all day. Sometimes I wonder if I'll look back on my most recent writing five years from now and have the same reaction.

    comment Lithwen · Community Member · Fri Feb 25, 2005 @ 07:25pm
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