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Ichi's Horcrux
If you understand why that's my journal's name, I will award you 30 house points. xD Anyway, I'll angst in here and put any poems that aren't too awful. &3
bzt (a poem)
Bzt.
this is the sound of her heart
Bzt.
this metal piece inside her chest
Bzt.
does almost everything a
Bzt.
human heart can do
Bzt.
it pumps her blood
Bzt.
through her body
Bzt.
to her lungs
Bzt.
and brain
Bzt.
her feet
Bzt.
fingertips
Bzt.
and of course, back to itself
Bzt.
but this metal thumping object
Bzt.
that resides behind her ribs
Bzt.
is not a heart
Bzt.
it cannot love
Bzt.
nor hate
Bzt.
nor feel anything at all
Bzt.
and one may wonder
Bzt.
how does this girl feel about...
Bzt.
ha
Bzt.
you shouldn’t wonder about
Bzt.
what cannot be
Bzt.
you may wonder, instead
Bzt.
why this cold-hearted girl
Bzt.
has a cold heart
Bzt.
september, it started
Bzt.
she told the doctors
Bzt.
“my heart, it has a small break
Bzt.
please, fix it”
Bzt.
the doctors fixed her
Bzt.
and it left only
Bzt.
a tiny scar
Bzt.
october came
Bzt.
and with it
Bzt.
another tear in her heart
Bzt.
“please, can you fix it”
Bzt.
they did
Bzt.
though this one left
Bzt.
a deeper, longer scar
Bzt.
november, december, january
Bzt.
passed without another break
Bzt.
and the long, deep scar
Bzt.
faded slowly until it was
Bzt.
a tiny scar once again
Bzt.
february
Bzt.
march
Bzt.
the longest and deepest
Bzt.
scar was left
Bzt.
though the doctors tried
Bzt.
tried
Bzt.
tried
Bzt.
to fix it
Bzt.
this scar did not
Bzt.
fade
Bzt.
it was far too deep
Bzt.
may arrived
Bzt.
and with it
Bzt.
a break and a knife
Bzt.
the break shattered
Bzt.
her human heart
Bzt.
completely
Bzt.
and the knife left twisted
Bzt.
broken
Bzt.
painful bits of metal
Bzt.
in the ruined heart
Bzt.
still the doctors
Bzt.
tried to fix her
Bzt.
but they could not
Bzt.
fix it this time
Bzt.
finally she said
Bzt.
“no more, please, no more
Bzt.
fix it, fix me”
Bzt.
and the doctors showed her
Bzt.
her scarred, mangled
Bzt.
bloody heart
Bzt.
beside it
Bzt.
a bionic, perfect
Bzt.
‘heart’
Bzt.
“we can’t fix
Bzt.
that heart anymore”
Bzt.
her hand closed around
Bzt.
the cold, silver ‘heart’
Bzt.
she held it to her chest
Bzt.
and smiled
Bzt.
her final smile
Bzt.
her real heart
Bzt.
was tossed away
Bzt.
at her command
Bzt.
Bzt
Bz
B
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wrote this when i was upset.
it sucks.
but whateves.


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    User Comments: [4]
    It doesn't suck Ichigo. I love it.
    It's sad, but beautiful.

     
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    comment Madlibzz · Community Member · Fri Sep 19, 2008 @ 05:54pm
    No sucky!! this is a really good poem i like the bzt's between every line it helps with the over all theme. speaking of wich i loved the theme. great sensory language and a good concept overall good job.

     
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    comment everlasting elegy · Community Member · Fri Sep 19, 2008 @ 10:49pm
    Such an interesting piece, I've never seen anything like it. I loved it though. You have great style, just like Dumbledore.
    How is your book coming?

     
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    comment MysteriousSoulreaper · Community Member · Sat Sep 20, 2008 @ 12:20am
    To be honest- at first, the 'bzts' annoyed me a little. xD; But as I read, I found them to be more likable. They work well- especially how they dwindle at the end.
    Another thing I like about the poem is its 'retrospect' tenses.
    I think it's perty gewd. O=


     
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    comment tsukiraven · Community Member · Mon Sep 22, 2008 @ 11:40pm
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