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Dusk to Dawn
Finding myself in a confusing world
sample, tell me what you think.
I'm writing a story that is like a mix of everything I've ever been interested in. This part is part of the prologue...

Mariya swallowed hard and ran faster, pushing her already strained muscles to their limit. She had been running for what seemed like hours now, and she felt as if she was about to collapse from exhaustion. Her stamina was higher than a normal person's, but she couldn't last forever ans she knew it.

so..tell me what you think?


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  • User Comments: [3]
    work on grammar...... confused you never commented on mine.

    comment Swift_Blink · Community Member · Fri Apr 13, 2007 @ 05:20pm
    i could understand the gremm4r mistakes since iyour typeing it
    ^_^
    so cant count against that.

    love the way you describe her pain as shes running.

    comment anoninja123 · Community Member · Sat Apr 14, 2007 @ 08:39pm
    Thanks..and yes...I'll work on grammar and spelling.

    comment xXSamantha_RXx · Community Member · Mon Apr 16, 2007 @ 01:17am
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