My love will still remain

• Artist: Spidellia
• Description: It's an old poem that I had written last march. It was for someone who had ignored and rejected me. We've pretty much gone our separate ways. It also took me 3 days to write it, and I hope you guys enjoy it as well. Criticism is also welcome. This is also my first writing entry.
• Date: 07/14/2011
• Tags: love will still remain romance

My heart it screams in silence
In which I cannot bare
Because all I have to give
Is this heart in which I spare
When I try to sleep at night
My heart it seems to scream
and no matter how hard i fight it
The stronger it gets it seems
and now I cannot sleep
for in fear of this defeat
of losing this last emotion
In which I dearly keep
To you, you may not be perfect
But to me you're pure and true
and for that i'm willing to sacrifice
The last of my heart to you
and no matter how time will change
or if my heart you take
all I can truly say, love
My love will still remain.

Comments

[Jericho39]

Also, I'd change both time you wrote "in which" to "of which" to get a better meaning.

[Jericho39]

Punctuation, punctuation, punctuation.