A Sonnet of Noble Blood

• Artist: kidontherampage
• Description: If any of you have read the Noble Blood Chapters then you'll understand most of what is being put across in this poem. It is in traditional Shakespearean sonnet form and I did this, like many of my other entries, for an English assignment.
• Date: 07/10/2010
• Tags: sonnet noble blood

The anonymous book I write, my love,
My sweet obsession, my long lonely life,
My way of expressing dreams from above,
A concoction of trials, struggles and strife.

I write to relieve my worrying thoughts…
…The midnight black feather and snow sky scarf…
But all these ideas, I dream but nought…
…A quick rising storm and burning fire staff…

…I saw black wings rise high above his back,
Stained with the bitter blood of his torment…
…From pure hatred, their foes commence attack…
…Raging fire breaks past his secret’s extent…

All this and more is stirring through my mind;
I fear the day I must leave all behind…

Comments

[LaffyTaffyTasty]

Of but really don't. The rest is a bunch of beautiful but loosely strung metaphors. The poem does not create a clear vivid image. This poem most likely confuse readers. In the end embelishment and using words to flourish this poem has failed because no message was really conveyed. Poems can be open and mean different things too many people but this didn't. All it had was a good transition sentence with a lack luster conclusion to sum it up. I wish I could give this poem a 3.5 but I can't.

[LaffyTaffyTasty]

Eh, mixed feelings about this. I like the fact that this poem says it,s a sonnet and actually is one. Most people on here who think they've written sonnets really haven't. All they have are quatrains with a matching ending rhythmic pattern, but this actually followed the sonnet format congrats. This in addition also has the right number of stanzas and most importantly a strict 10 syllable count which is what most people forget an is most challenging about this poetic style. I like this poem kind