my ex

• Artist: JOLLY TIMES IN BED
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• Date: 02/27/2010
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A special world for you and me
A special bond one can not see
It wraps us up in it cacoon
And holds us fiercely in its womb.

Its fingers spread like fine spun gold
Gently nesting us to the fold
Like silken thread it holds us fast
Bonds like these are meant to last.

And though at time a thread may break
A new one forms in its wake
To find us closer and keep us strong
in a special world, where we belong

Comments

[fufufufufu50]

really good but you might want to work on lines 2and 3, they kinda dont flow and 3 doesnt make sence at all =P

[thefartingspider]

Good..it's very creative...draws the reader in...however try to stay away from cliches like "It wraps us up in it cacoon". Thisngs like that are used ALOT. However i loved the line about the womb. Overal this poem was excelent 5/5

[Sharla Danielle]

brava...bratisemo...awsome