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It was a night during winter
At a village full of trees and thorns with splinters
People at this village would still tell this very tale
About the six feet creature in the haunted house
No one dares to step in
Neither man nor mouse
You are lucky for you will hear what had begun this very tale
It was on a cold winter night where no sound would be heard
And the folks at the village were sleeping like napping birds
A Stout old man soon walked thru to go to the haunted house
He was now the new owner of this house near the moon
This very house was rumored to give bad omen to whoever lives in it
But this stout old man murmured,
"All of those rumors are just to give you tremors"
He didn't heed to listen to any of the spouting or shouting of warning about the house
For no one had ever stepped in the house
Not even for a second or a step from a mouse
The old man was sure that no one or thing was inside the house
Soon at the haunted house
At the struck of midnight on the twelfth day of the old man's arrival
The man heard a noise when he was about to turn off the lamp
Like faint footsteps coming toward his room
Thump thump thump thump
The noise was getting louder as it came closer to the wall.... bumping
Thump thump thump thump
Soon the noise stopped
It was quiet too quiet
The man thought he was just having hallucination on the riot
But soon he heard something or something breathing
Huff huff huff huff
The man went out of his bed to check what was out there
He slowly opened the door barely
To see a huge shadow figure near his door
Glaring right down to him was beading red eyes
The creature must be at least tall as six feet
The old man felt afraid seeing the hideous beast
And was getting sick
As the creature breathe out his moldy breath
The old man just stood there like being super glued to the plank
He soon calmed himself down and saw an opening near the door
The old man soon dashed toward the opening like a boar
The vicious beast had noticed that the man tried to escape
And soon sprang on the man
BANG
A loud thunder soon had struck down nearby the house
And no one had met or knew what had happen to the proud old man
Now everyone in this particular village
Would tell about the house to their children at the beach on the sand
"Beware of the haunted house near the moon
For no one would go near the house
Even the bravest man doesn't go near the house
Nor would the bravest mouse
Because of a creature that lurks in the dark
And attacks you like chipping a bark
This six feet creature
Who can make you in fear and brave barely
Beware of this haunted house
For you shall not go near this house if you dare
But no one in the village had ever known the truth
Of what had happen to the stout old man
Who had lived in the haunted house
Where you would shiver in fear
Whether man or mouse

- Title: The Man and the House
- Artist: logitool
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Description:
Well this is more as a narrative poem that i had written a couple months ago.Its about a man that was living in a haunted house that had something living in it.
Sorry its such a long narrative poem and thank you for taking your time to read it :D plz give me an opinon about it - Date: 12/28/2009
- Tags: house
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Taikou Valkyrie - 11/17/2011
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I agree with rachelaurami and maybe try rhyming...
just a suggestion. - Report As Spam
- Rachel the Lunar Warrior - 12/28/2009
- hm it has a nice story but it trips a lot for a poem, go back and edit it and try to use different words, the repetition is wats keeping it from flowing
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