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A thousand tears That I have wept
while peacfully you have slept
on linens woven out of gold
while I cried and cried and cried myself old.
Pain has wisdom beyond our years
that always comes from shedding tears
for those we've lost and those tossed aside
and then, again, they cried and cried.
so silver blades draw bloody tears
that will accumulate through the years
that I have left to die away
for the thousand tears I wept today.

- Title: A Thousand Tears
- Artist: animbkwrm
- Description: Rate and comment guys. Love you all. <33
- Date: 11/10/2009
- Tags: thousand tears
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Comments (2 Comments)
- Deadlylight6 - 10/11/2010
- or get rid of the third "and cried" since some repetition can be off leading at times.
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- LienFlare - 11/13/2009
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reminds me of a friend who would always write really dark stories and always say life...*sigh*
Iono but line 4 stanza 1 just sounds awkward.
try something shorter like
traded for the soul you sold
OR
while I cried in gloom and cold
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