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It was almost December
And I remember
That morning clear as day
Momma was crying
And I was dying
To know why
She held me close and gave me a kiss
She said honey, I don't kno how to tell you this
But daddy, he's not coming home
He died serving his country
And daddy's not coming home
No matter how hard I plee
I'll miss the days I spent with him
Long trip taken on a whim
Bedtime stories and singing songs
Momma cries everyday
And I probably may
His funeral was in the spring
Everyone was there
And everyone who cared
He was lowered down
And everything was still
That day in April
That was eight years ago
And Momma and I visit him
We stay until the sky becomes dim
He died serving his country
And daddy's not coming home
No matter how hard I plee
I'll miss the days I spent with him
Long trip taken on a whim
Bedtime stories and singing songs
It was almost December
And I remember
That morning clear as day
8.23.09

- Title: (Daddy's) Not Coming Home
- Artist: ADSOC
- Description: i wrote the orginal when i was 14 and i have improved this song. this is fiction. tell me what you think and how i could improve
- Date: 08/24/2009
- Tags: daddys coming home
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Comments (3 Comments)
- Kibroth - 08/28/2009
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I definitely like it. Well thought out and put together. If it is fiction, then, in a way, I'm even more impressed.
There's a few technical things, spelling ("plee"-plea / "kno"-know) and rough areas, but the strength of the work balances these out.
4/5!
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- Angry Kitsune - 08/24/2009
- Whoaaaaaaa. Deep, chica. You are very good at expressing your emotions.
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