Tranquil Rage

• Artist: Hiroshin Genkai
• Description: I made this poem a few years ago and I could never real choose a good name for it...
• Date: 04/09/2009
• Tags: tranquit rage

Paint me a candle flame
Warm bodies in the rain
Soft mattress to stain
With thirty one flavors to the brain
Lying on the drug store floor
This is my game, only wanting more
Some say yours is just the same
Behind the unmarked door.

I came, I saw
Your dirty little war
I saw your scams
And I saw your kills.
Cheater, liar,
Trader,

How do you sleep,
How do wait,
Wait for the bus,
Wait for you gun,
How do you?

I don’t know you any more.
Why you still hear, no one
Cares for you, get out,
Get hit, fall down!

Comments

[Allanasha]

Not bad. It flows nicely ... The only thing I saw that needed fixing (possibly) is the fact that you have Trader instead of Traitor ... unless that was intentional. In which case, it's kind of confusing.