uncontrollable mind

• Artist: Lemonade Serenades
• Description: a little poem i did. i couldn't figure out what to call it, so if the name sounds dumb, then i apologize. if u r gonna even rate this, leave a DARN COMMENT!!!!!!!!!!!!! it is way more better that u do. i really pay attention to the comments for advice rather than the ratings!!!!!
• Date: 12/30/2008
• Tags: uncontrollable mind

The lies keep coming/ from ten to sixteen/ no matter how hard I try/ I seem to stay in between /no getting out/ only stories to tell/ I don’t see why/ I can never prevail.

Wrong yet right state of mind/ can’t get off this dangerous ride/ condemnations from myself/ and its going to nowhere else/ imprisoned my mind where I stay against my will/ my innocence makes its own way/ and as it fades away/ I go insane/ without any hope to get rid of my pain.

I can keep trying to have good intentions/ but my mind stays in a bad position/ so I stay in this isolated cell/ and my mind continues to dwell.

Comments

[Dark_Aeris-chan]

Really good but instead of doing the / signs u should just press enter instead so its easier to read. Other than that really good.
Read mine and comment?

~Rose~