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I can hear you calling me
Threw the night
It's not working can't you see
Us being together just ain't right
Now I spend my days alone
Wondering what to do
My heart has turned to stone
How can I not be with you
But then I began to see
I'm too strong to think that way
My family and friends will always love me
Their feelings will always stay
But try not to cry
This is our final goodbye.
- by Kitiara_fox |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 10/07/2008 |
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- Title: Goodbye
- Artist: Kitiara_fox
- Description: I began writing poetry after my dad died. This is the first poem I wrote. I have always asked friends to read them and give opinions, and help me figure out what i needed to fix but noone ever said what needed to be fixed so hopefully people on gaia can. So post your opinion please so i can become a better poet. Thank you so much!
- Date: 10/07/2008
- Tags: goodbye
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Comments (7 Comments)
- HERS_FOREVER - 10/13/2008
- I know how u feel i have been writing poetry for a year now i only got one on gaia please read These Feelings of Mine
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- BellaGirl24-7 - 10/12/2008
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i kinda kno how u feel in that poem. and its really beautiful.
ox~Bella~xo - Report As Spam
- skyprins - 10/10/2008
- This is a great poem...ur pretty good urself, i right poems myself too
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- Swiftgurl802 - 10/09/2008
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Very good!!
So beautiful!! biggrin - Report As Spam
- mexicantacos2003 - 10/09/2008
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this is raw with feeling. good start. the "threw" through me off. (get it?)
which is unexpected but very interesting to have a twist at the start.
i write freestyle so i cant give you advice but this poem is good.
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- A s t r o P i x e l - 10/09/2008
- ...*shock*...thats story waz soooooooooOOOOOOOO BEAUTIFUL...itz gaves me gas....
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- Hekibel - 10/08/2008
- Well, it's spelled "through" not "threw", but other than that it's amazing.
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