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Hush,
It’s a lullaby,
Can’t you hear it singing?
Can’t you hear
The distant beat,
Of my heart,
In time with yours?
Hush,
It's a lullaby,
Rocking you to sleep,
It's a melody
So swift and soft,
Innocently singing
And when it stops,
I’ll close my eyes,
And you’ll wake up –
Alone,
So hush,
It’s a lullaby,
Here for only you.
- by f a l l e t e |
- Poetry And Lyrics
- | Submitted on 07/18/2008 |
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Comments (5 Comments)
- A Taste of Fate - 12/22/2008
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honestly, i liked it. the words. u r right bout the no rhythm. but the words are good. to me the flow into one another...if you want to write something else like that and make it like a song, try coming up w/ a original melody first then try to put the words w/ it. if it doesnt fit then you might have to change a few things. anyway, i hope that helps. thts what i do when i write. so i think its good...
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- BoomBot Ninja - 12/21/2008
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Its good. Obviously, this is a poem you can entirely grasp yourself, but it may be harder for others to "get it". Next time, try adding a rhythm meter or a rhyme scheme. I'd like to read it!
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- 12Namine16 - 12/21/2008
- U your right about it having no rhythm what so ever and it's not that good either but.....2/5 I guess for making sense and trying.
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- Fredella - 07/18/2008
- it's alright I guess
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- Meth Related Nightmare - 07/18/2008
- Lullaby's are traditionally sing songy, so for it's tittle I didn't really like it.
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