Falling

• Artist: SlytherinPrincess01
• Description: A poem I wrote while trying to decide if I should tell this guy I liked him. It was written quickly, but it's my favorite.
• Date: 07/16/2008
• Tags: love falling

Why do I feel like I’m falling
When I am standing still?
Why am I scared to talk to him
When there is so much to say?
Why do I run away
When all I want is to be near him?
Why do the tears come as I think of him
When he’s the one who makes me smile?
Why do I feel this could never be
When I swear that anything is possible?
Why am I afraid of taking the next step
When that step could bring him to me?

Maybe I feel like I’m falling
Because he has turned my world upside down.
Maybe I ‘m scared to talk to him
Because I can’t face the truth.
Maybe I run away
To see if he will follow.
Maybe I cry
Because I’m afraid of losing him.
Maybe I feel this could never be
Because I’m scared of it happening.
And maybe I’m afraid of taking the next step
Because then I might fall.

Comments

[SachiGrl]

Wow. I love the first stanza!! Many people could relate to that. The second stanza is like a finishing touch to me, though i like leaving my poems unfinish its more mysterious and 'finished' to me. lmao!! Every poet is different thats why its fun to read 'em!!

[xZETSUBOUx]

i love this poem!!

[SlytherinPrincess01]

Thanks everyone for your criticism.
Btw, I told him and now we've been dating for over a year!

[white horse93]

people, stop OVERANALYZING!!!! *huff* it's a great piece. too true, it's a poet's freedom to use as much of a word as they want. so I think that it really shows how you felt on a REAL level. I agree with snowyjoe; tell him how you feel. what's the worst that can happen? finding out that he doesn't like you? that only leads to finding a new part of yourself. good luck.

[mintages]

Response to Frail: It's called repetition... It is a literary figure that many poets use, so it's the poet's freedom to use a liberal amount of the same word or words to define her meaning of the poem. But, I can see their points... Your points are very deep.... I have enjoyed your poem. smile

[Skies Without Stars]

AMAZING. <3 I love it. Great job. :] And I disagree with the others, I kind of believe in too many of the same words...but you made it work.

[Rawrz-Kun]

I'll also have to agree with Frail, using too many of the same words kind of ruin the feeling of the poem since it gets pretty old.