Goodbye

• Artist: Kitiara_fox
• Description: I began writing poetry after my dad died. This is the first poem I wrote. I have always asked friends to read them and give opinions, and help me figure out what i needed to fix but noone ever said what needed to be fixed so hopefully people on gaia can. So post your opinion please so i can become a better poet. Thank you so much!
• Date: 10/07/2008
• Tags: goodbye

I can hear you calling me

Threw the night

It's not working can't you see

Us being together just ain't right

Now I spend my days alone

Wondering what to do

My heart has turned to stone

How can I not be with you

But then I began to see

I'm too strong to think that way

My family and friends will always love me

Their feelings will always stay

But try not to cry

This is our final goodbye.

Comments

[kaggs]

awwwwww
5/5

[LaraCroft +JamesB]

I really like this , It's great ^^
Vote/Comment Back? Plz

[shadowly darkness]

in my opion you dont have to change anything
poetry is meant to express your feelings to words on paper
which is already very hard to do for most people

i like your poem
though it would be easier to read if you used the ''enter'' button a couple times
that way its easier and funner to read
also it brings up more emotions to the reader
but thats just what i think wink

keep up the good work