- War again i must sneak up on the enemy or they will kill my children Katara and Sukie. The enemy has been trying 2 get my beatiful city for 72 days. My people will fight 2 the death. I poofed myself behind an enemy soldier and slit his throat. The enemy soon broke into the city. I poofed home got the neighborhood children and put them n the hideway hole. I began with the troops killig dozens of men. ninja Then i saw my oldest Katara with my baby Sukie. Then a man killed her. I went beserk on him and the others to prtect my baby girl. evil I killed all of the enemies that were trying to kill my Sukie. Sukie was grabbed by my neighbors child. I killed 3000 men that day the enemy never bothered our city again. I grabbed my sukie and mever let her then an enemy shot me with an arrow killing me.
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- Title: Haruka the fan fan fighter see
- Artist: Cosmo Seed
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- Date: 08/18/2009
- Tags: haruka fighter
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- Wind-Blown Dandilion - 08/29/2009
- What he said. You should explain more of what is happening, like what had been happening during those 72 days, or what the enemy men were like, were they scruffy? Were they smelly? Dirty? Very neat and tidy? Describe what is happening, and then it will be awesome!
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- Ebrathral_Mars Dragon God - 08/28/2009
- dont abriviate in stories ues only words unless numbers are required that took a star away from what i was going to give u but other than that hmmm make it longer u have peaked my intrest good luck i give u 3/5
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